https://docs.google.com/document/d/1a-iK2Ea274q1sKSLe-OS14oN8LynMkU23j4eW1prie4/edit?usp=sharing
In case the link doesn't make you excited enough to read the story, I will also give you the preface:
My story is taking place in 1920 at Homer Park, which was on the bank of the Salt Fork River. It offered a variety of activities such as motion pictures, visiting the small zoo, and swimming in the river. Homer Park acted as a small settlement over the summer with cabins and even a post office. Homer Park had its so-called “Golden Age” during the 1920s which is a big part of why I chose the year 1920, as well as the fact that it would be 100 years ago. This time period also had the Interurban Railroad, which connected Homer to Urbana and Danville. My goal while writing this was to have a character that wouldn’t be familiar with the area and not realize she has gone back in time. I also wanted her to narrate her story in a more unconventional way to try to make it a bit more metafictional and interesting.
Unfortunately the link doesn't work and I (I don't know about anybody else) requires access to be given to me - I'm super excited to read this as soon as I can access the doc, the preface is already super interesting!
ReplyDeleteSorry! I forgot to change the settings. It should hopefully work now.
DeleteFor me, this link also does not work. However, because we were partnered for the peer-edit day, I have access to one of the other documents.
ReplyDeleteI like how you added the preface to your story, as it explains a lot of the details that I had initially wondered about. For example, I had no idea that Homer Park had historical significance, so that made sense retrospectively when I was reading about all of the attractions in the area.
I like you how took details from your own community to create your narrative. I have never been to Homer, so it was interesting to learn about its history. I also like how your character's speaking style is informal, and has developed a unique personality - it further divides 1920 from 2020. I think that you expanded on the historical details, and I like reading it in a more complete context. Overall your story is very well-written and the plot makes a lot of sense!
My bad! It should work now.
DeleteNice! I just re-read this and I can tell that you added a lot of details, all supplementing the historical context that I mentioned before. I like how you created a transition paragraph from your title to your introduction, as it really showcases the tone of what you wrote.
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